Author Topic: Constructive Criticism  (Read 1764 times)

HQVictor

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Constructive Criticism
« on: June 27, 2012, 06:22:53 pm »
You come up with excellent storylines and likeable characters, but please please please stop using the word OR.  You write as if you can't decide between two words you want to use.  For instance in Iron Kissed, you have "coerced or cajoled" and "leave or let you leave" and that is just two of them.  There are so many they take away from the reading experience.  Otherwise, your writing is well done... well except for the whole scene where Samuel says "Ok, we'll wait for Honey to come back with a chair.   Here she is." lol, made me laugh out loud, could have shown us and not told us.

Please accept this as constructive criticism and not simply bashing.  I do love your stories and your characters are easily identifiable.